We’ve already covered a few scenes sooner then I thought I would based on this structure, so we’re skipping that last one and going right to this one. We already laid out the demands of the regents back in the first chapter where Chaz had his little encounter with the Regent. I’m thinking perhaps, maybe we will only go with the one Regent at the moment. I know that for a while, I was having multiple regents, but I think for the moment, it makes more sense to have just the one … for the Americas. So here we want to set up a difficult choice for Chaz. One one hand if he doesn’t take the case and do what the Regent requested, the hopes for reuniting with his family become very distant. On the other hand, we need give Abby some sort of bargain position to offer Chaz. He obviously wanted family to be a part of his life, even though it’s been so many years gone. The best Abby has to offer him at the moment, is a very dysfunctional family. The kids are a mess, and she probably is too, although we don’t know that for sure. We haven’t delved much into her state of mind at the moment, other then to say that she’s concerned about her children. She does have the suspicions about Caius, and we know that he will get himself into a bunch of trouble later that needs addressing, so using him here will help set that up. If we can demonstrate that Chaz still has deep concerns for his son. As well, there’s always the thought, that Chaz could still reconcile with just Abby. She was military at one point, right? That’s how they met afterall. They are of a similar mind in some ways. He would likely see that as a good thing, even if he could just reconcile with her. Really though, he can’t let Abby know that he still has military work to do. So, what Abby wants and Chaz wants is sort of the same thing, it’s just that he can’t really let Abby know that much. He doesn’t really know that much. Hang on. Actually, maybe there is still stuff that needs to go into the prior scene. It could be a briefing on what the regents discovered about Captain Willies boat. You know, if I put that scene after this one, then you could probably really ramp up the tension. Have Abby lay it tough on Chaz in this scene, then have the regent (or their representitive … remember Raban) pull him into an emergency session to increase the importance of his mission for them. Maybe, have this scene setup, so that Abby convinces him that his family would be better off in prison. Especially Caius. It would stop him from joining the Renegade faction the Freeze. That’s good … I like that. So, start off this scene where Chaz meets Abby for the first time at the prison and they have bit of a discussion.
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So, where do we go now with the family. Last time we heard like six years ago, Abby and Caius and Shax had all run off to Peru to get away from the freaks running around North America. Chaz was desperately looking for them to gain some sort of closure with the family. The most he found, was her old house and her laptop. The laptop left clues, that there had been another man in her life but it was over. He took the laptop with him, and eventually ended up having a video call with her, where she was still upset over their whole split, and wasn’t ready to have the kids traumatized over the incident by talking with him, so he never actually got to talk with them. And, now six years later, he finds out that the entire family was brought to court, and are facing prison time for the crime of leaving the continent, and potentially putting the rest of the world at risk for the activity. So, what do we want to show in this section. Well, they should likely be in some hold facility of some sort to start with. Caius the son has become even more rebilious since the trial. He was pretty rebilious to start, what with being without a father. Maybe, it should start with a conversation he and his mother have about him having visitors that were known to be members of the renegade faction. What should we call the renegades. Fringe? How about Freakers? Maybe Freakerz. Yea, maybe that one. So, basically Caius hates his father for never being there but won’t admit it, is pissed at his mother, and now is facing prison time. Maybe the Freakerz … lets call them Freeze are offering Caius a way out. Maybe making promises they can’t keep, but something like a reduced prison time or something if he helps them out. They like the political profile it gives them … or maybe just the media attention. Let’s say, that Shax won’t speak to anyone, that it’s some sort of misdiagnosed condition, but she wouldn’t speak through the trial … maybe except to Caius. She whispers everything to her brother only. What we really want to do in this scene, is a bit of character introduction. Let the readers know about the family and what’s going on. Do they know about Chaz’s awakening … not sure on that. I didn’t say anything about it during the prior scene, so let’s say, that mom knows, but she’s keeping it a secret, and doesn’t want to tell the kids, but in secret through his connections with the renegade faction Freeze, Caius knows. Ok, let’s go with that.